10/10 – In class writing

Exposition: Walking into mall with 2 of my “best” friends

Inciting Action: Since a kid I’ve had to steal from stores to provide for myself since my parents had me young and they were struggling to provide for themselves and I.

Rising Action: The store was empty and the friends I was with spoke about how they’ve stolen from there before and told me that I should too. We began to head to the section that had the items that interested us.

Climax: Me getting caught with the stolen merchandise and the friends that gave me the idea that I should steal

Falling Action: Getting lectured by security and police officer and thinking to myself that it wasn’t worth it.

Resolution: Leaving that side of myself in the past and improving my morals as I was at the age that I was beginning to grow to be a man and I started to mature.

10/8 – In class writing pt 1

  • A complete rhetorical analysis goes in depth about the text and what it contains
  • That although the author lived through what he described throughout the speech he’s had what he’s describe happen to him
  • By reading through my essay and looking for any grammatical errors and by adding better vocabulary to draw readers attention
  • I would like to know more about rhetorical devices and if there are more than ethos logos pathos

Grammar Guide


  1. Sentence Fragments/Complete Sentences 

Independent Clause:

Sentence or complete thought

Dependant Clause:

Subordinate Conjunctions: after, although, as, as if, as though, because, before, except, if, since, though, unless, until, when, whereas

  1. Run-on Sentences

Run-on sentences usually occur as comma splices or fused sentences. A fused sentence occurs when independent clauses are joined with no punctuation. A comma splice occurs when a comma joins two independent clauses.

An independent clause is a sentence. It can stand alone and make sense.

Conjunctions:  FANBOYS- for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so

  1. Capitalization/Punctuation

Use a comma to set off two or more introductory prepositional phrases (prepositions-often give us more information about time, place, and movement: in, before, after, at, down, across, inside, out, outside, for, by, on, between, behind, under, around, against, near, through, throughout), when the prepositional phrase is very long (four words or more), or when a comma is needed to make the meaning clear.

Use semicolons to separate independent clauses that are brief and closely related.  This works best with cause and effect information. (Kristi’s skating routine is the best; she won six gold medals. It rained all day; our picnic was cancelled.)

Use semicolons instead of commas between items in a series if the items themselves contain commas. (Next week the President will visit Norfolk, Virginia; Cincinnati, Ohio, and San Antonio, Texas.)

  • He has a bike too, He has two bikes, To get a bike he needs to save money 
  • Hes greater than me at basketball, To determine who’s better lets play then 
  • We were at the gym, Where are you

Final Draft

MLK “I have a dream” Analysis

On August 28, 1963 Martin Luther King Jr delivered his most famous “I Have a Dream” speech where he asserts that all races should be equal. Martin Luther King develops his argument by stating examples of how the circumstances differed between colored and white people. The author’s purpose is to prove to the audience how unequal the races are being treated and he’s demanding change. Throughout my essay I will explain how Martin Luther King uses real life examples and multiple pathos appeals to show the audience how poorly the racial equality was during that time.

Martin Luther King Jr. addresses his speech to the March on Washington for Jobs and Freedom group at the Lincoln Memorial. King is one of the most famous civil rights activists in the United States for not only promoting equality across the country but his vast amount of bravery because civil rights was very controversial during the 60’s. Before this speech took place Dr. King lived a normal but unfair life as a minister of a Chrisitian church. He was disliked by many but he led a church that had a large amount of the community that attended his services and liked what he had to say. He proposes his speech to not only the African American community but to all Americans to promote his argument towards racial equality. King uses emotionally loaded language throughout his speech by explaining and showing examples of how unfair the treatment to the colored people was at the time. He explains how its not only society that’s treating the colored unfair that its the government as well such as police officers and government officials. He states, “We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of police brutality.” King has experience with police brutality because before the speech took place he was placed under arrest at one of his anti segregation protests for no logically good reason.

Dr. King has endured the evil of a racist society throughout his whole life and he uses that in his speech to show the audience that it’s not fair that the caucasian race should be superior if everybody is made the same and comes from the same place. Throughout the speech MLK uses emotionally loaded language to make the audience get to his level and and get an idea of what he has felt throughout his life. Some examples of Dr. King using emotionally loaded language, “A state sweltering with the heat of injustice”, “the dark and desolate valley of segregation”, “Transform the jangling discords of our nation”(King).

MLK has a very emotional paragraph where he states, “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character…”. This quote is very pathos appealing to the audience because he doesn’t say that he wants a better future for himself but for his children that he loves the most. The author’s purpose of this iconic speech is to show the American community that it isn’t fair to judge and mistreat someone by the color of their skin but by their character. Martin Luther King gets his argument across by using multiple pathos appeals throughout the entire speech and making those rhetoric appeals fitting perfectly in his speech and making it flow and not sound forced; that’s why this speech was so successful in the fight for racial equality. He doesn’t want the audience to feel lower than him because at one point King was in the same position as them; he wants the audience to feel close and relate to the statements throughout his speech. 

Dr. King uses emotional examples to insure to the audience that racial equality change in is urgent. He begins his speech referring to the Emancipation Proclamation by stating that after 100 years “…the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacies of segregation and the chains of discrimination.” This quote means that although the Emancipation Proclamation declared that all slaves shall be free that they are still enslaved into the unequal treatment of society and that colored people don’t get the treatment that they deserve. He appeals to the audience’s emotions by facing them with the facts of how unfair the treatment of the colored community is and how that they feel exiled in their own place of residence. Martin Luther King Jr. also refers to the Declaration of Independence, one of the most important documents created by the United States, and how inside of that document it explains how all men are created equal and deserve equal treatment. Although many respect that document during the time of this speech many disregarded that all men are meant to be treated equally.

By using rhetorical appeals Dr.King wants to get audience on the same page as him and consider what he has to argue. The author’s purpose of this iconic speech is to show the American community that it isn’t fair to judge and mistreat someone by the color of their skin but by their character.  He doesn’t want the audience to feel lower than him because at one point King was in the same position as them; he wants the audience to feel close and relate to the statements throughout his speech. This speech had a great impact on society and MLK was successful in getting the audience to agree with him.

10/1 – In class writing/conclusion

By using rhetorical appeals Dr.King wants to get audience on the same page as him and consider what he has to argue. The author’s purpose of this iconic speech is to show the American community that it isn’t fair to judge and mistreat someone by the color of their skin but by their character. He doesn’t want the audience to feel lower than him because at one point King was in the same position as them; he wants the audience to feel close and relate to the statements throughout his speech. This speech had a great impact on society and MLK was successful in getting the audience to agree with him.

Essay 1 – 2nd Draft

MLK “I have a dream” Analysis

On August 28, 1963 Martin Luther King Jr delivered his most famous “I Have a Dream” speech where he asserts that all races should be equal. Martin Luther King develops his argument by stating examples of how the circumstances differed between colored and white people. The author’s purpose is to prove to the audience how unequal the races are being treated and he’s demanding change. Throughout my essay I will explain how Martin Luther King uses real life examples and multiple pathos appeals to show the audience how poorly the racial equality was during that time.

Martin Luther King Jr. addresses his speech to the March on Washington for Jobs and Freedom group at the Lincoln Memorial. King is one of the most famous civil rights activists in the United States for not only promoting equality across the country but his vast amount of bravery because civil rights was very controversial during the 60’s. Before this speech took place he was  He proposes his speech to not only the African American community but to all Americans to promote his idea of equality. King uses emotionally loaded language throughout his speech by explaining and showing examples of how unfair the treatment to the colored people was at the time. He explains how its not only society that’s treating the colored unfair that its the government as well such as police officers and government officials. He states, “We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of police brutality.” King has experience with police brutality because before the speech took place he was placed under arrest at one of his anti segregation protests for no logically good reason.

MLK has a very emotional paragraph where he states, “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character…”. This quote is very pathos appealing to the audience because he doesn’t say that he wants a better future for himself but for his children that he loves the most.

Dr. King uses emotional examples to insure to the audience that racial equality change in is urgent. He begins his speech referring to the Emancipation Proclamation by stating that after 100 years “…the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacies of segregation and the chains of discrimination.” This quote means that although the Emancipation Proclamation declared that all slaves shall be free that they are still enslaved into the unequal treatment of society and that colored people don’t get the treatment that they deserve. He appeals to the audience’s emotions by facing them with the facts of how unfair the treatment of the colored community is and how that they feel exiled in their own place of residence. Martin Luther King Jr. also refers to the Declaration of Independence, one of the most important documents created by the United States, and how inside of that document it explains how all men are created equal and deserve equal treatment. Although many respect that document during the time of this speech many disregarded that all men are meant to be treated equally.

The author’s purpose of this iconic speech is to show the American community that it isn’t fair to judge and mistreat someone by the color of their skin but by their character. He doesn’t want the audience to feel lower than him because at one point King was in the same position as them; he wants the audience to feel close and relate to the statements throughout his speech.

9/24 – In class writing

  1. Who is the intended audience? All of the American community at the time
  2. Discuss how the intended audience is affected by or involved in the topic being discussed. Discuss the main characteristics of this audience, including values, assumptions, experiences, and stances that work for and against the piece’s interest. The audience is affected if the speech either made them believe in what MLK was saying or if they just brushed off what he said. The author was good at presenting the facts and how there was a problem in the United States community.
  3. How will the audience benefit from this topic? What can be done with the information provided? Why is it necessary to know this? What difference might it make? The audience will be benefited by this piece of work because they were faced with facts that proved to them that the treatment of the races other than white were unacceptable.
  4. In what context is the reader looking at this material? Are the readers already somewhat interested? Are they completely unaware? Are they antagonistic/hostile toward the topic, or doubtful about any point which might be made? Are they supportive/sympathetic? Are they neutral? How do you know? Why do you suspect this to be the case? Give your reasoning and evidence. The readers are interested because most agree with the author and demand change as well. For those that don’t agree they were faced with facts and hopefully the speech had a toll on them.
  5. What questions might the audience need to have answered? What questions might the audience be left with after reading/seeing/listening to the argument? What kind of background information might they need before they accept the claim? Some background information the audience might need is to know the treatment between colored and white people was no where near the same and change was needed immediately. 
  6. What is the audience’s background (for example, technical or educational)? In general, are they prepared and able to understand, interpret, and apply the information in the piece?  Who is the intended audience? The audiences background varies because it was set toward to show everybody in the country that racial equality was at an all time low.
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